docholligay replied to your post “So we like HaruMichi BatB, huh? Here’s part two! Part one is here…”

(not that the last one was Not Good, it was, but this one has a much more polished gleam)

Oh I’m glad, I wrote this one with SO MUCH more care. Part one was 100% your prompt making me think of it again and wanting to run with it and not overthink it, and this one I slowed down and though about things. I had the thought WHILE WRITING part one that if I continued, I was going to want to rewrite part one, but I knew that without getting the first part out, I’d never continue.

docholligay replied to your post “So we like HaruMichi BatB, huh? Here’s part two! Part one is here…”

I NEED you to know that “time no longer tethered the shades” is a fucking KILLER line, Sam

actually the writing and turn of phrase in this WHOLE THING is fucking brilliant

It takes a fairy tale quality on through the flow itself, this entry is really well integrated into the idea

THANK YOU. I’ve been working on language and flow lately, and I love using Michiru as a vehicle for it.

rhiorhino replied to your post “So we like HaruMichi BatB, huh? Here’s part two! Part one is here…”

Nooooooo ������

CUE MY EVIL LAUGHTER

(thank you for all your tags too Rhio!! I’m so gad you like it!)